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- I believe you write like I do .. is why I noticed right away .. it’s how I get my idea into words

- Its possible we deploy similar ‘Writing Mechanics - enabling ‘idea to become written words

Both statements ‘say the same thing - but the first attempt includes 5 pronouns (you’ve already figured out ‘it’s me’ that’s explaining right.. so why do I keep telling you .. ‘I’ ?

This goes back to Cormac McCarthy & the idea of writing ‘dialogue - such that a reader ‘knows exactly which Character is speaking .. One can think of other examples - Tom & Huck Finn

Am pretty sure you’ll be grinning while reading the dialogue in Cuba Libre - Elmore Leonard. Conversation between the Cowboy & Livestock Agent.. Opening Chapter I believe

Apologies in Advance re pointing out ‘Excessive Pronoun Use’ - as part of Writing Mechanics. My ‘growing belief - ‘is that they are useful when’ initially pumping out our ideas into scenarios initially.. & do Note my intentional fail re ‘that they are useful when’ ! Why not reduce to ‘is they’re useful’ ? .. am trimming useage of ‘that’ drastically too !

It’s early morning .. & going to put some music on .. & breeze into Chapter 10 with fresh eyes ..

Did look through your Index & Most Impressed ! I’ve a tendency to visit a well regarded writer’s initial Posts - see where the’ve come from etc.. or any About page or sample their Notes - so that’s something for later ! Have some experience re CBC btw but ‘THAT’ was way back near 1990 & be a cold day in hell they ever get a whiff of my Creative Properties again haha ! 🦎🏴‍☠️🖤

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i stopped reading - 40 secs in - immediate thought - ‘needs constructive ‘word editing..

Will gladly return to the read - but consider accepting that someone credible - to you !

Will say the same .. & with respect

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